Thursday, June 14, 2007

My doll


In came a beautiful dame.

Oh, How fair she is!

“What’s your name ?”

I asked,when my heart felt the bliss.


Dressed in velvet

She looked so chic

Lot to say, yet

I’ve kept myself so laconic.


“I’m a man so simple

You can count on me”

Silence she showed in ample

Keeping me at sea.


“Tell me who you are”

I pleaded so earnestly.

She doesn’t care, she’s gone far

Treating me unkindly.


I turned to leave with a gloomy face

“Is admiring beauty a sin?”

I felt,and as my heart began to lose pace

I realized it was only a mannequin.



MY first attempt at a serious, medium length poem :D

Please comment.Thanks :)

13 comments:

renuka said...

nice poem...nice 2 see tht u r venturing into poems also..brings lots of variety :)...

hemanthi said...

Wow ra it is awesome...u definitely have talent....it's very nice/...

Rajeev Turlapati said...

@hemanthi:thanks to u my dear sis :)
@renuka:thanks a lot..

deepthi said...

hey,some gr8 poet in makin here :)

beautiful poem!really liked it..keep writin more

supraja suresh said...

nice poem!!....u can improve on the ending parah.... :-)

Vijayturlapati said...

nice poem indeed....but don't lose heart over..her..i'll show u many..more chics...come to my place duniya dhikataa hoon....

Akshaya said...

I don't know for a moment I was shocked that you actually wrote a poem on this theme. Something so unlike you, I feel.

But yes, a good first one :)

Varun said...

Offoo getting all romantic huh :P

Very good for a first attempt! I couldn't write anything longer than a Haiku :P Hehe too bad she was only a mannequin...

Rajeev Turlapati said...

@varun: :P...wen r u writin ur story of romance? ;)

Varun said...

Let me get gf first noo... then I'll write ;)

sravanthi palaparthy said...

now u into poems too?!?!
btw nice poem...:)

sum4me said...

damn that is good...now lets see you do some shayari...seriously..

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