In came a beautiful dame.
Oh, How fair she is!
“What’s your name ?”
I asked,when my heart felt the bliss.
Dressed in velvet
She looked so chic
Lot to say, yet
I’ve kept myself so laconic.
“I’m a man so simple
You can count on me”
Silence she showed in ample
Keeping me at sea.
“Tell me who you are”
I pleaded so earnestly.
She doesn’t care, she’s gone far
Treating me unkindly.
I turned to leave with a gloomy face
“Is admiring beauty a sin?”
I felt,and as my heart began to lose pace
I realized it was only a mannequin.
MY first attempt at a serious, medium length poem :D
Please comment.Thanks :)
13 comments:
nice poem...nice 2 see tht u r venturing into poems also..brings lots of variety :)...
Wow ra it is awesome...u definitely have talent....it's very nice/...
@hemanthi:thanks to u my dear sis :)
@renuka:thanks a lot..
hey,some gr8 poet in makin here :)
beautiful poem!really liked it..keep writin more
nice poem!!....u can improve on the ending parah.... :-)
nice poem indeed....but don't lose heart over..her..i'll show u many..more chics...come to my place duniya dhikataa hoon....
I don't know for a moment I was shocked that you actually wrote a poem on this theme. Something so unlike you, I feel.
But yes, a good first one :)
Offoo getting all romantic huh :P
Very good for a first attempt! I couldn't write anything longer than a Haiku :P Hehe too bad she was only a mannequin...
@varun: :P...wen r u writin ur story of romance? ;)
Let me get gf first noo... then I'll write ;)
now u into poems too?!?!
btw nice poem...:)
damn that is good...now lets see you do some shayari...seriously..
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